Dark Omega

Dark Omega

by DM B  

In the grim darkness of the distant future there is only war. Beset on all side by multitudes of malefic enemies, the Imperium of Man tethers on the brink of destruction. Only the foresight and guidance of the immortal God-Emperor provides Humanity with a faint glimmer of hope. Vast armies of brave men give battle in His name on countless worlds, striving to keep the horrors of the final night at bay.

One such brave warrior is MARCUS AURELIAN, master psyker and prodigal Interrogator of the Holy Orders of the Inquisition. His mistress, the Lady Xerza, wields the absolute and inviolable authority of an Imperial Inquisitor, and Marcus is her sworn servant and trusted confidante. Recruited for his transcendent intellect and uncanny martial prowess, it is Marcus' fate to stand on the front lines of a great and secret war: the War on Heresy. It is a conflict that has raged unabated for more than ten thousand years, beginning when Warmaster Horus turned to Chaos and raised his banners in rebellion against his Father and Emperor.

Marcus has been entrusted with a sacred task: to retrieve the forbidden tome of Lord Inquisitor Melbinious and bring it to his shadowy mistress. It is hoped that the tome holds secrets that, despite their damning nature, could be vital to the ultimate survival of Mankind. Marcus' epic quest has spanned nearly a decade and countless light-years. Now the tome is finally within his grasp: soon all will be revealed...

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Dark Omega (revised edition) is the first book in a trilogy. The second volume, Parting the Veil, is planned for release early 2016.

Hope you enjoy it!

B.

Current version (Wattpad.com only) - WIP

 

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Dark Omega

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Comment from: Messiahcide [Visitor]
Messiahcidedefinitely one of my favorite reads. It was an honor to get to a chance to give some input on it (despite it mostly being praise for the narrative).
05/06/14 @ 03:50
Comment from: tancred [Member]  
It was a privilege to have your feedback! Still a bit to go, but I hope to have your feedback on book 2 as well!
05/06/14 @ 17:43
Comment from: darthsith [Visitor]
5 stars
darthsithLiking it so so far. Will keep reading. Good luck with the next one.
05/13/14 @ 16:45
Comment from: golgol [Visitor]
4 stars
golgolThe 2nd person take a bit to get used to, but it actually works when you get a bit into the story. As long as I read you = Marcus I'm fine.
05/13/14 @ 16:56
Comment from: tancred [Member]  
Also available on Wattpad.com
05/18/14 @ 14:00
Comment from: tancred [Member]  
People wanting to proofread: Please use the attached version!
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05/26/14 @ 18:42
Comment from: Rolando [Visitor]  
5 stars
Rolando(Sorry about my english, its a litle bit Rust) Thanks dude really... im impress in the quality if the work. This is my first time reading a 40k novel after reading tons of lore on wikias, and i must say i really liked it. I feel like i was there and i believed the lore... and the tecnology existed in this wolrd. Keep the good Work. *And thanks for sharing, i cant wait for the 2nd part..
12/10/14 @ 00:42
Comment from: Rahv [Visitor]  
5 stars
Rahv

An excellent all round read:

A Superb synthesis of wh40k lore; intricate in the inconsequential realism of its detail, and a horrifyingly unvarnished, gritty vision of life a grim dark future.

Brilliant use of narrative technique. I'd have never imagined that 2nd person sequences would work so well; the intimate sense of becoming the protagonist is profound, and the 1st person narrative simply makes more sense than it ever has before In the context of an interview. This juxtapositioning of narrative displays an astonishing grasp of story telling technique for a first time author, but beyond that, leaves me wondering if the entire industry has missed something of consequence in ignoring this literary style.

The vivid use of language to set and describe scenes is advanced; once again, it is difficult to view this as the first work of an amateur author, little lone one for whom English is not a first langauge.

Both the characterisations and the plot advance at a well measured, stately pace, leaving the reader wanting more, without invoking impatient sentiments. The use of perpherial characters to advance the readers grasp of the plot, while simultaneously establishing the Galaxy spanning context of the drama the protagonists are embroiled in is an excellent touch.

I do feel that some of the plot developments are a touch contrived, but this is the fundamental anthropic problem at the heart of all heroic fiction, which even best sellers generally don't manage particually well.

There are some 40 typos through the manuscript, which is entirely forgivable in a novel that doesn't have a professional editor. I must apologise for not tagging these; I only determined the context for this novel after reading it. I should note that the consistency of the narrative voice despite the constant shifting in narrative and tense is outstanding work; I've read bestsellers with fundamental flaws in the use of narritive, which have escaped both the author and the editors. As the use of narritive in this novel is quite complex, the seamlessness with which it is delivered is only a more impressive achievement.

I do feel that this novel is ultimately regulated to the realms of fan fiction, by virtue of the subject matter; by contrast the depth of writing talent and narrative ingenuity which has turned a tired 40k plot line (machinations of a daemon prince attempting to become a power/manifest in the corporeal universe) into a genuinely engaging and gripping tale, is simply inspiring. The length of the story suggests to me that the trilogy should be published as a single volume, however I do appreciate the need to release in part given the time frames involved when writing is not your primary occupation.

Ultimately, this is an excellent read that is not only quite publishable, but stands as a testament to the artistry of its author; I do believe that you've found a true calling. I've been quite privileged to read this novel and definitely owe the author $20.

02/15/15 @ 11:54
Comment from: rahv [Member]
rahvAll apologies for the lack of sentences and paragraphs. Chaos has struck again.
02/15/15 @ 11:58
Comment from: tancred [Member]  
Yes: Chaos, in the form of bad blog software! I can see you line breaks in the backoffice, but it is displayed as plain text - for some unknown reason. Sigh.
02/16/15 @ 08:33
Comment from: tancred [Member]  

First of all: I am of course extremely glad to hear you liked Dark Omega!

Beyond that I must thank you, not only for reading it, but for taking time to write a long and candid review. You've no idea how much it means to get feedback above and beyond the 'Love it!', 'Hated the 2nd prsn POV', etc. Worth much more than 20 bucks, that's for sure :-)

In no particular order:

Typos. Yes, I hate those. I've spent endless hours hunting for them, but alas, without a real editor I cannot find them all. I'm more or less blind to my own errors I'm afraid.

I do think I have a nice writing style. It's (fairly) unique and engaging. For this 40k novel I've chosen a language that's a little flowery, but that's meant as a compliment to the baroqueness of the setting. I don't think most people notice I'm not a native speaker, but perceptive language-savvy readers will likely suspect. Again: if I had a real editor I think those chinks could have been ironed out.

I was quite please with my use of the 2nd person POV. It is a very unusual technique in fiction, but I wanted to try it out (part of the reason for writing DO was getting writing experience, so experimentation was in order). It wonderfully supports the duel of minds between Marcus and Haxtes, allowing me to subtly highlight the differences and similarities between the two - and the blurring of the distinction of their personalities later on (I'm sure you picked up those instances where Marcus stats to act slightly out of character).

I've gotten wildly varying feedback on the POV. Some, like you, have found it immensely refreshing. The majority, however, have been put off by it. It seems the more people know of the setting, the easier they have identifying with the 'You' character. But for the majority of readers the 'You' word is simply confusing. I'm a bit perplexed by this reaction; when I read the old Fighting Fantasy books back in the day, I had no problem imagining myself as a wizard or warrior. And role-players all over the world do this every day, pretending to be something they are not, becoming immersed in their fantastic worlds in way men of less imagination cannot. You could even make the point that all these so-called 1st person video games are actually just as much 'You' as they are 'I'.

You are entirely correct in that it could/should have been a single volume. But the story kept growing, and soon it was too big, not necessarily for a single volume, but for me to finish in one piece. I had to hack it up, first into two, then finally into three piece to make it manageable.

Btw: I'm immensely pleased that you've realized this isn't ultimately the story about Haxtes and/or Marcus, but about the daemon's machinations. I've grown so fucking tired of all the mind-less Space Marine novels and the Chaos-as-colorful-monsters type books. I wanted to try to make Chaos subtle, insidious, and terrifying in a more mundane, day-to-day sort of way.

One final thing. You may or may not like this, but I'm doing a partial re-write of Dark Omega. In essence the story is the same, but without the 2nd person POV. There are some other narrative changes as well, shamelessly trying to showcase characters that might appeal to a wider audience. Although I'm please with the changes and things the overall story is better told, I'm very sad to see the 2nd person POV go. When I become a rich and famous writer I'll introduce the world to this clever technique :-)

Currently the revised version is WIP and can be found only here: http://www.wattpad.com/story/32263185-dark-omega-revised-ed

It will probably also be posted on fanfiction.net and on my website (once it's done).

02/16/15 @ 09:19
Comment from: tancred [Member]  

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02/16/15 @ 10:30
Comment from: tancred [Member]  
Another test Another test
02/16/15 @ 10:33
Comment from: Dave Roe [Visitor]
Dave RoeHaving had a look at the latest version, it looks like you've put the story in a brand new background setting. Does this mean the next book won't be a 40k story?
09/28/15 @ 20:15